A cover letter is a document sent with your resume to provide additional information on your skills andexperience. A cover letter typically provides detailed information on why you are qualified for the job you are applying for. Effective cover letters explain the reasons for your interest in the specific organization and identify your most relevant skills or experiences.
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Now, let's apply for the best job in the world
The best job in the world
According to your skills and interests, what is the best job for you?
Task 1:
Match the position vacant with the corresponding function:
Position vacant
1. Chief Funster
2. Taste Master
3. Wildlife Caretaker
4. Outback Adventurer
5. Lifestyle Photographer
6. Park Ranger
Functions
a. Wake up the Kangaroos, swim with dolphins and sea lions and explore the Kangaroo Island.
b. Create photo shoots and work with high profile designers and artists.
c. Crash festivals and events, write reviews and live the life of a Sidney VIP
d. Check the water temperature, patrol the beaches and leave only footprints
e. Eat your way around the state, forage out the finest produce and uncover the best bars and restaurants.
f. Travel the outback, meet the locals and have a new adventure every day.
Glossary
Crash: to test something to see if it is safe and reliable
Patrol: to move regularly around a place in order to prevent trouble or crime
The outback: the large areas of land in Australia that are not used for growing crops and are far away from any city or town.
Forage: to search in a wide area for something, especially food
1. Listen to the audio and fill in the gaps with the missing words.
50 candidates for ‘best job in the world’
The world will soon ____________ who will get the “best job in the world”. The position is for a caretaker to live on and look after a tropical island off the ____________ of Queensland, Australia. Duties include relaxing on the island, which is part of the Great Barrier Reef, and writing a blog to ____________ the area. Other responsibilities are to feed the fish, clean the pool and collect the mail. The job website, islandreefjob.com, tells ____________: “There are over 1,500 species of fish living in the Great Barrier Reef. Don’t worry. You won’t need to ____________ them all.” The successful applicant will get a salary of nearly US$100,000 for the six months. Officials from Queensland’s ____________ department announced on Tuesday that they were now ____________ at 50 candidates. Unsurprisingly, over 35,000 people ____________ for the job.
The next stage in the selection ____________ is to get the list of candidates down to 11. The tourism board will ____________ ten people. Visitors to the website will choose an eleventh person. The public can look at the video applications of all 50 ____________ caretakers. The eleven lucky finalists will then fly to Hamilton Island for a ____________ interview. The winner will be announced on May 6, and the job starts on July 1. The ____________ shortlist of 50 includes people from 22 countries. They include dancers, chefs, scientists and students and they all want a ____________ of paradise. Queensland Tourism Minister Desley Boyle said there was much discussion to ____________ down the list to 50. He told reporters, “it boiled down to…the motivation and professionalism of the applicants and their '____________' with the job and Tourism Queensland”
2. Read this cover letter and analyze this candidate profile.
Dear Mr. Johnson,
I’m a highly motivated candidate to take the island caretaker job in Australia that is being promoted by your domain. I think I have the skills to carry out the responsibilities you mentioned in your website.
First, I have already had some outdoor jobs in my country giving me the work experience you are looking for this job. Also I have worked with many projects that are addressed to protect natural resources in my country. In these jobs, I have traveled to remote areas where I have learned to adapt to difficult living situations. Finally, I am also good at taking pictures. I am a photographer who loves working with nature, even when I know it is not easy.
In addition, I consider myself a quick learner. I have never written a blog, but I could learn how to do it. I am also a responsible and easygoing person. Last year I worked as a supervisor in a clothes store and I got the best employee award. I also value teamwork and I have the quality to work with others. Most importantly, I am a very curious person who tries to search adventure in daily life.
Thank you very much for your time and consideration.
Sincerely,
Samantha Strong
3. Read Samantha’s cover letter again and complete the chart.
Qualifications and Skills
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Work Experience
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Personality Traits
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4. Analyze Samantha’s profile and answer this question: should Mr. Johnson hire Samantha? Support your answer.
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Activity prepared by Alejandra Jiménez and adapted by Deisa Gómez
How to write a cover letter
Now, let's study how to write a cover letter. Go to:
http://archive-ca.com/page/957127/2012-12-14/http://www.thewclc.ca/edge/issue3/coverletter/coverletter.html
Homework assignment
Write your cover letter to send to the company you are going to apply for you to do your internship
September 30
Are you sure you chose the right career?
One of the keys to a happy life is enjoying the job you do. That’s why finding the right career is
very important. Take this video test to help find a career that best suits your skills, personality and
interests!
According to your answers, what is the right career/job for you?
Proofreading
Informal/formal writing style
Informal writing style
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Formal writing style
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Greetings:
- Mr. Walter Osorio
- Dear President of NASA Company
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Dear Sir/Madam
Dear Mr.*/Mrs./Miss Smith
To whom it may concern |
Stating the purpose of your letter:
- I write to apply for….
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-I am writing in response to the internship listing/posting I saw on your website for a…
-I am writing to apply for...
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Expressing your interest and skills:
- I like this internship since...
- I’m good at…(gerund or noun)
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-I feel I would be well suited for this internship position
- I have a good command of... (gerund or noun)
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Concluding sentences:
- Thanks for your attention and have a nice day
- Can’t wait to hear from you
- Thanks for your time.
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- Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
- I would be delighted to discuss any possible vacancy with you at your convenience. In case you do not have any suitable openings at the moment, I would be grateful if you would keep my CV on file for any future possibilities.
- I would welcome the opportunity to speak with you personally about my qualifications and experience. I look forward to hearing from you.
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Endings:
- Sincerely,
- Best regards,
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-Yours sincerely,
-Yours faithfully,
- With kindest regards
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*Mr. used for a man
Miss. (mis) Used for an unmarried woman
Mrs. (misiz) Used for a married woman
Ms. (miz) Used for a woman whether she is married or not. Often used by a woman who does not want to let people know about her status.Pair work:
Today we will be proofreading our own cover letters to apply for an intership in the company selected.
Use the cover letter evaluation checklist to proofread one of your classmate's cover letter with a classmate
EPM COVER LETTER:
ResponderEliminarCarlos Mauricio Franco Rendón
23 Street, number 40 – 116, Buenos Aires
Phone: 2218974
Email: cmfrancor@unal.edu.co
September, 2015
EPM director
65 Street, number 100 – 109
Dear EPM’s Director
I am so motivated with the employment for interns that you posted in the company’s website; I also think I have the qualification for the job.
Nowadays, I’m studying control engineer at the National University of Colombia and I truly want to get my first job.
First of all I am a very responsible person and a good coworker. Last year I ended my studies in systems technic at SENA and I ended an English course in Comfenalco too, I have B2 level according the CEFR.
I have no job experience yet, but I have participated on volunteer activities, that could truly make me a good intern. I’m good in computer maintenance and in basic programming, As I told you before I have a good level of English too and I know that a company as EPM value this a lot in the employees.
I know you value a lot that your workers help each other with their skills, that’s why I’ll always be a friendly hand to the partners that need me, I have no problem also if you need me to share my knowledge, and so to learn of the others knowledge.
Sincerely,
Mauricio Franco
1. Applicant’s name: (Yes)
Eliminar2. Is the cover letter addressed in a right way? (No)
Comment: You must to investigate the name of the EPM´s president and use it in the addressing for your cover letter like the examples.
3. Does the cover letter provide interesting information about the candidate? (Yes)
4. Does the cover letter include information about candidate's skills, educational background, job experiences and personality traits? (Yes).
5. Does the cover letter end with a strong closing phrase? (No)
Comment: You can use a strong closing phrase for make it more formal I recommend to based in the examples in the blog.
6. Is the cover letter's writing style professional? (No)
Comment: Use I am instead I´m, “, As”, is wrong after (,) don’t go caps lock, and you can use only three or for paragraph and “Sincerely,
Mauricio Franco” is wrong too.
7. Does the cover letter include formal expressions? (No)
Comment: Just like we said you can use more formal expression, read the page “cover letter” in the blog, there you can read some examples for it.
8. Is the cover letter written with right punctuation? (No)
Comment: You must to correct the use of the (,)
9. Is the format of the letter clear? Each major section includes all required information (personal information, salutation, body, closing, signature)? (Yes).
From Sahory Torres, Santiago Hincapié and Juan Córdoba.
Greetings.
Dear EPM’s Director WHAT IS THE LAST NAME OF THE DIRECTOR?
EliminarI am so motivated with the employment for interns that you posted in the company’s website; I (also) think I have the qualificationS REQUIRED for the job.
Nowadays, I(’) Am studying control engineerING at the National University of Colombia and I truly want to get my first job.
First of all I am a very responsible person and a good coworker. Last year I (ended) COMPLETED my studies in systems (technic) at SENA (and I ended) AS WELL AS an English course (in) AT Comfenalco (too), I have B2 level according the CEFR.
I have no job experience yet, but I have participated (on) IN volunteerING PROGRAMS activities, that could truly make me a good intern. I(’) Am good (in) AT computer maintenance and (in) basic programming, As I told you before I have a good level of English (too) and I know that (a) YOUR company (as EPM valueS this a lot in the employees) REQUIRES PEOPLE WHO ARE ABLE TO COMMUNICATE IN ENGLISH.
I know you value a lot that your workers help each other with their skills, that’s why I(’) WIll always be a friendly (hand) COWORKER (to the partners that need me) AND I have no problem (also) if you need me to share my knowledge, and so to learn (of) FROM the others' knowledge.
INCLUDE A CONCLUDING SENTENCE HERE
Sincerely,
Mauricio Franco
VERY GOOD JOB MAURICIO. CORRECT YOUR ERRORS AND POST IT IN YOUR WEBSITE
GRADE: 4.4
BHPBilliton COVER LETTER:
ResponderEliminarMariana Montoya Gómez
41 Street, number 52 – 52, Building Granada,
Phone: 5610183
Email: mamontoyago@unal.edu.co
September, 2015
BHPBilliton director
Dear BHPBilliton’s Director
I’m a highly motive candidate to make the internship in your environmental department. I think I have the skills to fit the job. First, I have been working in water bioremediation since I was beginning my degree and I think that my knowledge in this topic could better the environmental impact and decries the waste of metals in your actual process. Also, I worked with another company bettering the extraction of a mineral, so I already know how this companies work. In this project I learn how to leader a big group and how to prioritize the time and the human and natural resources.
In addition, I consider myself a hard-worker, creative and dynamic person. I had the opportunity to work in groups and I realized that I am excellent being part of a team. I’m responsible, dedicated and honest. But most important, I am positive and I feel prepared to deal any problem.
Thank you very much for your time and consideration.
Sincerely
Mariana Montoya Gómez.
1. Is the cover letter addressed in aright way?
EliminarY:
N: x
2. Does the cover letter provide interesting information about the candidate?
Y: x
N:
Dear BHPBilliton’s Director is informal.
3. Does the cover letter include information about candidate's skills, educational background, job experiences and personality traits?
Y: x
N:
4. Does the cover letter end with a strong closing phrase?
Y:
N: x
5. Is the cover letter's writing style professional?
Y:
N: x
Use I am instead I´m, “Be sure” Don´t use I think.
Grammar mistake I am a highly motivated instead of I am a highly motive
6. Does the cover letter include formal expressions?
Y:
N: x
7. Is the cover letter written with right punctuation?
Y: x
N:
8. Is the format of the letter clear? Each major section includes all required information (personal information, salutation, body, closing, signature)?
Y: x
N:
Sahory Torres, Santiago Hincapié and Juan Córdoba.
BHPBilliton COVER LETTER:
EliminarMariana Montoya Gómez
41 Street, number 52 – 52, Building Granada,
Phone: 5610183
Email: mamontoyago@unal.edu.co
September, 2015
Dear Mr.West
Dear BHPBilliton’s Director
I am writing to apply for the vacant in the environmental department I am a highly motive candidate to make the internship in your environmental department. I have the skills to fit the job. First, I have been working in water bioremediation since I was beginning my degree and my knowledge in this topic could better the environmental impact and decries the waste of metals in your actual process. Also, I worked with another company bettering the extraction of a mineral, so I already know how this companies work. In this project I learned how to leader a big group and how to prioritize the time and the human and natural resources.
In addition, I consider myself a hard-worker, creative and dynamic person. I had the opportunity to work in groups and I realized that I am excellent being part of a team. I’m responsible, dedicated and honest. But most important, I am positive and I feel prepared to deal any problem.
Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
With kindest regards.
Mariana Montoya Gómez.
Great letter Mariana! there are some mistakes to correct:
EliminarDear BHPBilliton’s Director WHAT IS THE LAST NAME OF THE DIRECTOR?
I am writing to apply for the vacant in the environmental department I am a highly motiv(e)ATED candidate to (make) DO the internship in your environmental department. I have the skills to fit the job. First, I have been working in water bioremediation since I was beginning my degree and my knowledge in this topic could better the environmental impact and decries the waste of metals in (your) ITS actual process. Also, I worked with another company (bettering) SEARCHING HOW TO IMPROVE the extraction of a mineral, so I already know how (this) THESE companies work. In this project I learned how to BE A leader OF a big group and how to prioritize the time and the human and natural resources.
In addition, I consider myself a hard-worker, creative and dynamic person. I had the opportunity to work in groups and I realized that I am excellent being part of a team. I’m responsible, dedicated and honest. But most important, I am positive and I feel prepared to deal WITH any KIND OF problem.
Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
GRADE: 4.5
EPM COVER LETTER:
ResponderEliminarSebastian Bacca Gonzalez.
69 Street, circular 3 – 40, San joaquin,
Phone: 3117524628
Email: sbaccag@unal.edu.co
September, 2015
I´m an excellent student capacitated to realize my internship in ENVIRONMENTAL AND SOCIAL MANAGEMENT UNIT POWER GENERATION I have experience in topic about cyanobacteria’s and I think that this is important to participate in the project cyanobacteria’s management plan for generation EPM reservoirs, I´m capacitated to perform analysis and sampling I have experience un consolidated information, and solution search or a plan to study all about this topic. I´m responsible, dedicated, and very interesting about all the topics in relation of cyanobacteria’s, I´m an excellent element in the moment of work in groups, I know listening, opine, and development excellent Project in favor of resolve the problems.
Dear EPM Director
Thank you very much for your consideration.
Sebastian Bacca Gonzalez.
Is the cover letter addressed in a right way? No. Because he doesn’t put who is addressed the letter.
EliminarDoes the cover letter provide interesting information about the candidate? Yes.
Does the cover letter include information about candidate's skills, educational background, job experiences and personality traits? No. He omits some information about his educational background.
Does the cover letter end with a strong closing phrase? Maybe but we think it’s very informal.
Is the cover letter's writing style professional? No. We consider he doesn’t use technical words and he use informal writing style.
Does the cover letter include formal expressions? Yes. He use some formal expressions but he is a little unorganized and maybe he could be more formal.
Is the cover letter written with right punctuation? No. He doesn’t use a right punctuation.
Is the format of the letter clear? Each major section includes all required information (personal information, salutation, body, closing, signature)? No. He forgot to put salutation.
Sebastián! check your cover letter based on Wendy's comments! then I will do other corrections!
EliminarEPM COVER LETTER:
EliminarSebastian Bacca Gonzalez.
69 Street, circular 3 – 40, San joaquin,
Phone: 3117524628
Email: sbaccag@unal.edu.co
September, 2015
Mr. EPM Director
A Greeting.
I´m an excellent student, capacitated to realize my internship in ENVIRONMENTAL AND SOCIAL MANAGEMENT UNIT POWER GENERATION; I have experience in topic about cyanobacteria’s, I made a specialization in different types bacteria’s and I have the opportunity to development project and works in relation of manage of bacteria’s and cyanobacteria’s, I think that this is important to participate in the project cyanobacteria’s management plan for generation EPM reservoirs, I´m capacitated to perform analysis and sampling; I have experience un consolidated information, and solution search or a plan to study all about this topic. I´m responsible, dedicated, and very interesting about all the topics in relation of cyanobacteria’s; I´m an excellent element in the moment of work in groups, I know listening, opine, and development excellent Project in favor of resolve the problems.
Mr EPM Director
Thank you for your consideration. I expect you answer.
Sebastian Bacca Gonzalez.o.
Mr. EPM Director WRITE HERE THE LAST NAME OF THE DIRECTOR
EliminarA Greeting.
I AM WRITING TO APPLY FOR THE INTERNSHIP POSITION. I´m an excellent student, (capacitated) TRAINED to (realize) DO my internship in ENVIRONMENTAL AND SOCIAL MANAGEMENT AT UNIT POWER GENERATION; I have experience in topic about cyanobacteria(’s), I (made) DID a specialization in different types OF bacteria(’s) and I have the opportunity to develop(ment) projectS and works in relation (of) TO (manage of) bacteria(’s) MANAGEMENT and cyanobacteria(’s), I think that this is important to participate in the project cyanobacteria’s management plan for generation EPM reservoirs, I´m (capacitated) TRAINED to perform analysis and sampling; I have experience (un) IN consolidated information, and solution search or a plan to study all about this topic. I´m responsible, dedicated, and very (interesting about) INTERESTED IN all the topics (in relation of) RELATED TO cyanobacteria’s; I´m an excellent (element in the moment of) PROFESSIONAL workING in groups, I know HOW TO listen(ing), (opine) GIVE OPINION, and develop(ment) excellent ProjectS in favor of (resolve) SOLVING the problems.
(Mr EPM Director)
(Thank you for your consideration. I expect you answer.) Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
GOOD TRY SEBASTIAN! CORRECT YOUR ERRORS AND POST IT IN YOUR WEBSITE.
GRADE: 3.7
ANGLO-GOLD ASHANTI
ResponderEliminarJuan Felipe Mejía Agudelo
84 St. 46-37, Floresta
Phone: 3113134556
Email: jfmejiaa@unal.edu.co
September 2015
I´m completely interested in this job opportunity, and i believe i have most of the skills and i fullfill almost all the requirements for the design and field work you need to accomplish the construction of the colombian gold mine extraction project. My curriculum vitae corroborates my experience as a senior manager in a few projects successfully executed. I´m capacitated in 3D design softwares, AUTOCAD and Photoshop, also I have no problem with unusual journals and working in groups. I define myself as a disciplined, patient and diligent person and also able to work down pression, it minds that deadlines doesn´t scare me. I guess I´ll be back tomorrow to meet my project partners and sign the contract.
Thanks for your time.
Juan Fellipe Mejía Agudelo
Is not fullfill, is fulfill.
Eliminaryou have so much contractions.
Whoen you use expressions like "i believe", or "i Guess", you are showing doubt, and it is not a good thing to be chosen for an internship, you must be more sure about yourself
Is the cover letter addressed in a right way? No Because, he didn’t greet
Does the cover letter provide interesting information about the candidate? Yes
Does the cover letter include information about candidate's skills, educational background, job experiences and personality traits? Yes
Does the cover letter end with a strong closing phrase? No
Is the cover letter's writing style professional? No He is very informal
Does the cover letter include formal expressions? No He even write thanks for your time
Is the cover letter written with right punctuation? No Because if you start a new phrase you must to use a dot.
Is the format of the letter clear? Each major section includes all required information (personal information, salutation, body, closing, signature)?
No
Juan Felipe! check your cover letter based on Mariana's comments! then I will do other corrections!
EliminarANGLO-GOLD ASHANTI
EliminarJuan Felipe Mejía Agudelo
84 St. 46-37, Floresta
Phone: 3113134556
Email: jfmejiaa@unal.edu.co
October 2015
Intership Division Office
Dear Mr. Kluksdahl
Im completely interested in this job opportunity and I´m an excellent candidate for this internship position. I fulfill almost all the requirements for the design and field work you need to accomplish the construction of the colombian gold mine extraction project. My CV corroborates my experience as a senior manager in a few projects successfully executed. I´m capacitated in 3D design softwares, AUTOCAD and Photoshop, also I have no problem with unusual journals and working in groups. I define myself as a disciplined, patient and diligent person and also able to work down pression, it minds that deadlines doesn´t scare me.
Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
Dear Mr. Kluksdahl
EliminarI Am completely interested in this job opportunity and I´m an excellent candidate for this internship position. I fulfill almost all the requirements for the design and field work you need to accomplish the construction of the colombian gold mine extraction project. My CV corroborates my experience as a senior manager in a few projects successfully executed. (I´m capacitated) I HAVE A GOOD COMMAND OF (in) 3D design softwares, AUTOCAD and Photoshop(,). (also) I have no problem with unusual journals and working in groups. I define myself as a disciplined, patient and diligent person and also able to work (down) UNDER pression, it (minds) MEANS that deadlines (doesn´t) DO NOT scare me.
Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
ACTUALLY I EXPECTED A MUCH BETTER COVER LETTER FELIPE.
GRADE: 4.0
27rd Sep 2015
ResponderEliminarGroup Renault Colombia
Dear Sirs Sofasa
I would like to apply for the post of Maintenance manager as advertised in The ADN Newspaper on Tuesday 20th Sep, with regard to your requirements I believe that I am a suitable candidate for this post as I have 5 years of Maintenance experience in Auteco and Yamaha . I am available to work from October.
i am a very responsable person, I am a competitive person with Capabilities efficient application of skills , values and behaviors of productive activities related to the assembly, design , welding and lubrication , corrective and preventive maintenance of machines
I enclose an up-to-date curriculum vitae, a recent photo and addresses of referees and am available should you require more information regarding my application.
Javier Ceballos
jdceballost@unal.edu.co
25077 22
cll 41# 72-24 Medellín Colombia.
Corrections:
EliminarIn this little paragraph we will try to give you some advices to your cover letter. First of all you are going to investigate who you are writing the letter for or you will use the expression “To whom it may concern”. You can also write a little more about your educational background, you have to be sure about what you are saying, use I am sure or I the perfect candidate instead of I think. We recommend putting your personal information at the beginning.
We also see little grammar mistakes, in the third paragraph you said am available, you forgot to write “I” that is truly very important. In the second paragraph you forgot to use the final dot and in the beginning of the first paragraph you forgot the capital letter too.
We hope these advices could help you.
Made by:
Sebastian Bacca
Mauricio Franco
Javier! check your cover letter based on Carlos's comments! then I will do other corrections!
Eliminar25rd Oct 2015
EliminarDear SAMUEL GALLEGO BHPBilliton’s Director
I am writing to enquire if you have any vacancies in your company Nowadays, I’ Am studying Mechanical engineering at the National University of Colombia and. As you can see, I have had extensive vacation work experience in office as ÉXITO, CLARO, TELEPERFORMANCE another services, giving me varied skills and the ability to work with many different types of people. I believe I could fit easily into your team.
I am a conscientious person who works hard and pays attention to detail. I'm flexible, quick to pick up new skills and eager to learn from others. I also have lots of ideas and enthusiasm. I am a creative thinker, i enjoy solving problems.
I have excellent references and would be delighted to discuss any possible vacancy with you at your convenience. In case you do not have any suitable openings at the moment, I would be grateful if you would keep my cover letter on file for any future possibilities.
Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
Sincelery
Javier Ceballos
jdceballost@unal.edu.co
25077 22
cll 41# 72-24 Medellín Colombia.
GAX COVER LETTER.
ResponderEliminarSofía Mesa Gómez
25 Street, number 38 –54, Buenos Aires
Phone: 3013870566
Email: sofi001mesa@gmail.com
September, 2015.
I´m an excellent candidate for this internship position. My experience includes 6 months of kindergarten volunteering program. This experience helped me develop personality traits such as being more diligent, patient and level-headed. Besides, I took a course of first aids at SENA and an extracurricular course of photography. I am a creative and resourceful person, and that´s why I can do excellent design projects. I am an outgoing, sympathetic and optimistic person and it is easy for me to work in groups. I am a passionate person with what I do, and I always try to do my best. For all the personality traits and skills that I have, I believe that I’m a perfect candidate to work in this Company.
Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
Sofía Mesa Gómez
EXCELLENT JOB SOFIA! YOU HAVE A VERY GOOD WRITING SKILL, JUST PAY ATTENTION TO THE USE OF CONTRACTIONS IN A FORMAL WRITING!
EliminarGRADE: 5.0
Sahory Torres Amaya.
ResponderEliminarStreet 63/ Number 80A-146, Building "Mirador la 80". Chemical engineering student. Number Phone: 3196036631. E-mail= Sactorresam@unal.edu.co.
September, 2015.
Dear BHPBillitons's director.
Hello, I hope you are fine.
I'm very happy for the opportunity to present this letter to you. I want to tell you that for me would be a great honor work in BHPBillitons. I am a very responsible person, I like to be punctual. I am a person who likes to learn every day.
I like chemistry and mathematics.
About my experience, I participated in some chemistry seminars in the university and I learned some important things about Optimization of chemical resources. I am not good writing, but I promise to improve.
Thank you for your attention.
Sahory Torres Amaya
At the start of the letter it is better to put the name of the director of the company or the person that receive the cover letter, if you don’t know the name of the person you can put to whom it may concern, but we think it’s better to put the name. It’s important to give more information about the skills of the chemical engineering and the options that you can offer to the company, we think that is very important to mention skills but no the personal skills but professional skills that help the company, it’s not good to write something in that you are not good at, because you are giving a bad reference of you in that point, it is also important to give any job experience really any, because that help you to have a better opportunity to have the job but it is possible to not have experience, in the end of the letter ends in a very informal way, it looks like you write to a friend and not to a company director, in the writing style part it is the same point before, because you look like you are writing to someone you know for a very long time and not someone that might give you a job, after this you see that the letter does not include formal expressions, the letter have some mistakes in the punctuation like - person, I – , the contractions. It has the right format. :3
EliminarNatasha Hernandez
Andrés Córdoba
Sahory! check your cover letter based on Andrés Felipe's comments! then I will do other corrections!
EliminarI am writing in response to the internship. I think that I am an excellent candidate for this internship position. I am very responsible, when the problems occur, I solve them immediately. I really enjoy helping people. I have a good command of of the computer and many electronic devices that are required at some kind of event in the company. About my experience I have worked in some seminars about chemical processes, I have learned a lot and I consider myself very good in chemistry. At the moment I am learning English in my University.
EliminarFinally I would welcome the opportunity to speak with you personally about my qualifications and experience. I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Sahory Torres.
Sahory Torres Amaya
Eliminar63 Street, number 80A –126, Robledo.
Phone: 3196036631
Email: sactorresam@unal.edu.co
October, 2015.
I am writing in response to the internship. I think that I´m an excellent candidate for this internship position. I am very responsible, when the problems occur, I solve them immediately. I really enjoy helping people. I have a good command of of the computer and many electronic devices that are required at some point handle to some kind of event in the company. About my experience I have worked in some seminars about chemical processes, I have learned a lot and I consider myself very good in chemistry. At the moment I am learning English in my University.
Finally I would welcome the opportunity to speak with you personally about my qualifications and experience. I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Sahory Torres.
Andrés Felipe Córdoba Portilla
ResponderEliminar76 street diagonal 80-205
Phone : 313-633-0666
E-mail: pipe.cordoba13@gmail.com
September, 2015.
Dear EPM´s Director.
I'm very excited for the chance to presen you this letter. In wich i want to express the happiness to have a chance of work in the company. I'm a serious person in the case of work, i like that the things that i do always be the best, i enjoy to work whit new people and learn things that they can teach me.
In my experience, i worked in a lab in the university, also i participated in 2 tec week of petroleum engineering, and some more in chemistry.
I consider that my level of english is good, and that's a point that i consider very important, because in this days the english is a base in business and in the life of the companys.
Thank you for your time.
Andrés Felipe Córdoba Portilla.
Víctor Daniel Jaramillo Gómez
ResponderEliminar47aa Street Number 67-93
Phone: 313XXXXXXX
E-mail: vdjaramillog@unal.edu.co
September 2015
Dear Mr. Iriarte
I write to your company, to apply for an intership in the technical area of UNE|TIGO. as a engeneer on forming , my fresh knowledge, and enthusiam, I may contribute with so many things to the company, and the experience of UNE|TIGO in the market of telecomunications and informatics may be a very good fountain to get more knowledge, and practice and improve knowledge that i already have.
I'm very curious with all about the systems, that includes hardware and software, i can learn very quick, and i can't stay still, i would like so much to practice with the networking and its control.
Thank you for invert your time in this letter, i appreciate so much your interest, and i will waiting for your answer in a near future.
With kindest regards
Is the cover letter addressed in a right way?
EliminarYes
Does the cover letter provide interesting information about the candidate?
Yes, it seems that he knows very well his skills and how to apply them at the job.
Does the cover letter include information about candidate's skills, educational background, job experiences and personality traits?
Yes, because it seems to be a full review of his skills and personality traits. Looks like he knows the structure of the company and a sector where he will work in.
Does the cover letter end with a strong closing phrase?
No, very cheesey, theres no need to be such a boot-licker to someone just to apply 4 a job.
Is the cover letter's writing style professional?
Yes.
Does the cover letter include formal expressions?
A few.
Is the cover letter written with right punctuation?
Yes.
Is the format of the letter clear? Each major section includes all required information (personal information, salutation, body, closing, signature)?
Yes.
Sofia & Juan Felipe
Victor! check your cover letter based on Sofía and Juan Felipe's comments! then I will do other corrections!
EliminarVíctor Daniel Jaramillo Gómez
Eliminar47aa Street Number 67-93
Phone: 313XXXXXXX
E-mail: vdjaramillog@unal.edu.co
September 2015
Dear Mr. Iriarte
I write to your company, to apply for an intership in the technical area of UNE|TIGO. as an engeneer on forming , my fresh knowledge, and enthusiam, I may contribute with so many things to the company, and the experience of UNE|TIGO in the market of telecomunications and informatics may be a very good fountain to get more knowledge, and practice and improve knowledge that I already have.
I am very curious with all about the systems, that includes hardware and software, I can learn very quick, and I can not stay still, I would like so much to practice with the networking and its control.
I would be delighted to discuss any possible vacancy with you at your convenience. In case you do not have any suitable openings at the moment, I would be grateful if you would keep my CV on file for any future possibilities.
With kindest regards
Dear Mr. Iriarte
EliminarI write to your company(,) to apply for an intership in the technical area of UNE|TIGO. as an (engeneer on forming) ENGINEER TRAINING. I CAN CONTRIBUTE WITH my fresh knowledge, and enthusiam TO YOUR COMPANY(, I may contribute with so many things to the company,) and the experience of UNE|TIGO in the market of telecomunications and informatics may be a very good (fountain) SOURCE to get more knowledge, (and) practice and improve knowledge that I already have ACQUIRED.
I am very curious with all about the systems, that includes hardware and software, I can learn very quickLY, and I (can not stay still,) AM VERY ENERGETIC AND KEEN TO LEARN FROM YOUR EXPERIENCE. I would like (so much) to practice with the networking and its control SO MUCH.
I would be delighted to discuss any possible vacancy with you at your convenience. In case you do not have any suitable openings at the moment, I would be grateful if you would keep my CV on file for any future possibilities.
With kindest regards
GOOD JOB VICTOR. TRY TO BE MORE FORMAL WHEN YOU WRITE THIS KIND OF LETTERS.
GRADE: 3.9
BHPBilliton COVER LETTER:
ResponderEliminarNatacha Hernández Villa
22ª Street, number 61-26, Barrio Nuevo, Bello
Phone: 3002374210
Email: nahernandezvi@unal.edu.co
September, 2015
BHPBilliton Director
7 Avenue, number 114-33, Bogotá, Colombia
Dear BHPBilliton’s Director
I am a student of Environmental Engineering, and have skills for environmental management in public or private entities and / or development projects that require the formulation of viable plans or strategies for the solution of environmental problems, following the regulatory parameters. My areas of knowledge are strategic environmental evaluation, planning and land use planning, risk management and water treatment and solid waste management.
I like teamwork, I have leadership and good communication skills.
Therefore, I consider myself a suitable candidate to apply for a position in your company.
Much appreciate your attention.
Natacha Hdez.
Dear BHPBilliton’s Director WHAT IS THE LAST NAME OF THE DIRECTOR?
EliminarI am a student of Environmental Engineering, and have skills for environmental management in public or private entities and / or development projects that require the formulation of viable plans or strategies for the solution of environmental problems, following the regulatory parameters. My areas of knowledge are strategic environmental evaluation, planning and land use planning, risk management and water treatment and solid waste management.
I like teamwork, I have leadership and good communication skills.
Therefore, I consider myself a suitable candidate to apply for a position in your company.
WHAT ABOUT YOUR EXPERIENCE?
Much appreciate your attention. IMPROVE THIS CONCLUDING SENTENCE AND ADD AN ENDING!
GRADE: 3.8
Santiago Hincapié Mejía
ResponderEliminarPhone:3002840140
E-mail: shincapiem@unal.edu.co
September, 2015
Dear EPM Director :
I`ll be glad to do my internship in EPM, Nowdays i`m finishing my carrer in the national university as an architect constructor, at the moment i don`t have job expirience, but i know how to work in programs like Autocad,rhinoceros,sketchup,proyect and photoshop;I have a high draw skill so I have a good perspective on the proyects and a creative point of vew to solve problems,
I feel confortable working under pressure,I`m responsible and honest, I like doing thing as perfect as I can ,thinking how to offer the best for the owner of the proyect,the clients and the workers.
Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
Santiago Hincapié M.
Dear EPM Director : WHAT IS THE LAST NAME OF THE DIRECTOR?
EliminarI(`) WIll be glad to do my internship in EPM, Nowdays (i) I(`) Am finishing my (carrer) MAJOR in the (n)National (u)University as an architect constructor(,). (at the moment) CURRENTLY i don`t have job expirience, but i know how to work in programs like Autocad,(r)Rhinoceros,(s)Sketchup,proyect and photoshop;I have a high drawING skill so I have a good perspective on the proyects and a creative point of vIew to solve problems,
I feel confortable working under pressure,I`m responsible and honest, I like doing (thing) MY JOB as perfect as I can ,thinking how to offer the best for the owner of the proyect,the clients and the workers.
Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
INCLUDE AN ENDING
GOOD LETTER SANTIAGO! TRY TO INCLUDE SOMETHING RELATED TO EXPERIENCE (VOLUNTEERING, SOCIAL WORK, OR SOMETHING LIKE THAT) REMEMBER ALSO TO HAVE A GOOD PUNCTUATION, IT IS PARAMOUNT FOR YOUR PROFESSIONAL LIFE!
GRADE: 4.0
Wendy Orozco
ResponderEliminar10, 69 Street, 51a Road, apt 401, Sevilla,
MEDELLÍN, Antioquia, Colombia.
Phone: (+57) 313 454 1954
E-mail: wporozcoce@unal.edu.co
Ken Kluksdahl
President, AngloGold Ashanti Colombia S.A.
15, 116 Street, 7 Road, floor 8, Cusezar Building, Usaquén,
BOGOTÁ D.C., Colombia.
Dear Mr. Kluksdahl
I am writing because I am applying for geological engineering internship that I saw in company’s website. My CV is attached.
Currently I am studying geological engineering in National University of Colombia – Campus Medellín. I do not have experience as geological engineer yet but I have belonged to Society of Economic Geologists, Inc. (SEG) a year ago.
Maybe I do not have job experience but I learn quickly. Also I am so motivated because I really love my career and I know your company is the best mining company in the world so I could learn a lot about mining from you. I am a responsible, hard-working, charismatic and persistent person and I am sure I will be an excellent worker.
Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I really look forward to hearing from you soon.
With kindest regards,
Wendy Orozco
Dear Mr. Kluksdahl
EliminarI am writing because I am applying for geological engineering internship that I saw in YOUR company’s website. My CV is attached.
Currently I am studying geological engineering (in) AT National University of Colombia – Campus Medellín. I do not have experience as geological engineer yet but I have belonged to Society of Economic Geologists, Inc. (SEG) a year ago.
Maybe I do not have job experience but I learn quickly. Also I am so motivated because I really love my career and I know your company is the best mining company in the world so I could learn a lot about mining from you. I am a responsible, hard-working, charismatic and persistent person and I am sure I will be an excellent worker.
Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I really look forward to hearing from you soon.
With kindest regards,
EXCELLENT JOB WENDY!
GRADE: 5.0
Andrés Felipe Córdoba Portilla
ResponderEliminar76 street diagonal 80-205
Phone: 313-633-0666
E-mail: pipe.cordoba13@gmail.com
September, 2015.
Dear Mr. Calle
I am in response to the internship posting on EPM’s website. I know that I have the skills for this job, i am studying petroleum engineering at National University of Colombia an actually i am in the last semester of my career.
In this moment i am applying to this internship because i want to do something that i know it would help me on my professional life. In the case of my skills, i am a person that works very well in group, i have a good command of programs and simulators, and also I know how to design basic chemical process in a plant of production.
Talking about my experience, I have worked in a laboratory in the university, also i work giving advice in some university subjects, my last work was in Expo Agrofuturo whit the company Monomers.
I consider that i am a person responsible, happy, interested in learn new things every day. I consider that are more things that make me a good option in your company.
I would be delighted to discuss any possible vacancy with you at your convenience. In case you do not have any suitable openings at the moment, I would be grateful if you would keep my CV on file for any future possibilities.
Yours sincerely,
Dear Mr. Calle
EliminarI am APPLYING FOR THIS INTERNSHIP in response to the internship posting on EPM’s website. I know that I have the skills for this job, (i)I am studying petroleum engineering at National University of Colombia anD (actually) CURRENTLY (i)I am in the last semester of my career.
In this moment i am applying to this internship because i want to do something that i know it would help me on my professional life. In the case of my skills, i am a person that works very well in group, i have a good command of programs and simulators, and also I know how to design basic chemical process in a plant of production.
Talking about my experience, I have worked in a laboratory in the university, also i work (giving advice) AS AN ADVISOR in some university subjects, my last work was in Expo Agrofuturo whit the Monomers COMPANY.
I consider that i am a (person) responsible AND happy PERSON, interested in learnING new things every day. I consider that THERE are more things that make me a good option in your company. (MENTION THESE THINGS OR ERASE THIS COMMENT)
I would be delighted to discuss any possible vacancy with you at your convenience. In case you do not have any suitable openings at the moment, I would be grateful if you would keep my CV on file for any future possibilities.
Yours sincerely,
GOOD JOB! CORRECT YOUR MISTAKES AND POST IT IN YOUR WEBSITE!
GRADE: 4.4
Juan Adalberto Cordoba Martinez
ResponderEliminar54 road 38A - 17 Itagüi
Phone: 321-928-5831
E-mail: darkthren@hotmail.com
October, 2015.
Dear Miss. Mesa
I’m writing in response to the internship vacancy posted in the last GAX's call. I know in have the necessary skills, I’m finishing my career, petroleum engineering in the National University of Colombia.
I’m applying to the internship because I want to start to work in anything according with my career and I think GAX is the best option, I decided it because I think it can help me to develop my skills and increase my experience in the area. Now, talking about my skills I must to say that I learn so fast and I’m not afraid to get mistaken if it helps me to improve.
About experience I must confess that my first and unique work was as a waiter in a fast food restaurant and some voluntary labors with the police and also 2 weeks in a nursing home bringing food and help with some task there.
I consider that I’m a person responsible, intelligent, happy, interested in learn new things every day, always ready for do what is needed and I think that makes me a good option for your company.
I would welcome the opportunity to speak with you personally about my qualifications and experience. I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Dear Miss. Mesa
EliminarI(’) Am writing in response to the internship vacancy posted in the last GAX's call. I know (in) I have the (necessary) REQUIRED skills, I(’) Am finishing my career, petroleum engineering in the National University of Colombia.
I’m applying to the internship because I want to start to work in (anything) MY FIELD OF EXPERTISE (according with my career) and I think GAX is the best option(,). I decided it because I think it can help me to develop my skills and increase my experience in the area. (Now, talking about) REGARDING my skills I must (to) say that I learn so fast and I’m not afraid (to get) OF BEING mistaken if it helps me to improve.
About MY experience (I must confess that) my first and unique work (was) HAS BEEN WORKING as a waiter in a fast food restaurant and (some) I HAVE ALSO WORKED AS A VOLUNTEER (voluntary labors) with the police and (also 2 weeks) in a nursing home bringing food and help with some task there.
I consider that I’m a (person) responsible, intelligent, AND happy PERSON, interested in learnING new things every day, I AM always ready (for) TO do what is needed and I think that (makes me) I AM AN EXCELLENT PROFESSIONAL (a good option) for your company.
I would welcome the opportunity to speak with you personally about my qualifications and experience. I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
GOOD JOB JUAN! IMPROVE YOUR WRITING ABOUT YOUR EXPERIENCE AND CORRECT YOUR MISTAKES.
GRADE: 3.8
ResponderEliminarEPM COVER LETTER (with corrections)
Carlos Mauricio Franco Rendón
23 Street, Nº 40 – 116, Buenos Aires
Phone: 2218974
Email: cmfrancor@unal.edu.co
September, 2015
EPM director
65 Street, Nº 100 – 109
To whom it may concern.
I am writing in response to the internship posting I saw on you website, I feel that I am a good candidate for the position.
Nowadays, I am studying control engineering at the National University of Colombia and I truly want to get my first job.
First of all I am a very responsible and respectful person, that makes me a good coworker. Last year I ended my studies in systems technic at SENA and I ended an English course at Comfenalco too. I have B2 level according the CEFR.
I have no job experience yet, but I feel I would be well suited for this internship position. I have a good command of computer maintenance and programming.
I know you value a lot that your workers help each other with their skills, that is why I will always be a friendly hand to the partners that need me; I have no problem also if you need me to share my knowledge, and so to learn of the partners’ knowledge.
Thank you for taking the time to consider this application and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
Yours sincerely,
Mauricio Franco.
HI CARLOS! MY FEEDBACK IS ABOVE!
EliminarJulìan Arrubla Gallego
ResponderEliminarstreet 127 south
movil: 3128914501
Dear Mr interviewer
I'm interested in the option of practicing your company GAX gasoline, I'm a good candidate for the position.
day today and I study economics in last semester,
at the National University of Colombia.
I am a disciplined, responsible and respectful person, I am a good teammate teamwork, I am obedient and entrepreneur, between my studies, I am SENA accounting technologist, I have advanced degrees in Excel and Project with microsoft office.
My work experience is great, because I worked as assistant accountant, also worked doing statistical analysis and seller in a store.
Currently, I do not master the English language, but it is in my interest to learn, I am a person interested in learning for life as a professional.
really, I'm very interested in making my academic practices in your company, you can be very useful as a student of economics and I know I can learn a lot from ustedes.a
I am attentive to your answer.
Dear (Mr interviewer) LAST NAME OF THE PERSON OR IF YOU DON'T KNOW, WRITE To whom it may concern
EliminarI(')Am interested in the option of (practicing) DOING MY INTERNSHIP AT your company GAX gasoline, I(')Am a good candidate for the position.
(day today and) I study economics in last semester,
at the National University of Colombia.
I am a disciplined, responsible and respectful person, I am a good teammate (teamwork), I am (obedient) DILIGENT and entrepreneur, (between) REGARDING my studies, I (am) STUDIED AT SENA accounting technolog(ist)Y, I have advanced degrees in Excel and Project with microsoft office.
My work experience is great, because I worked as AN assistant accountant, also worked doing statistical analysis and I WAS A seller in a store.
Currently, I (do not master) AM NOT PROFICIENT IN the English language, but it is (in) my interest to learn, I am a person interested in learning for life as a professional.
(really,) I'm very interested in (making my academic practices) DOING MY INTERNSHIP in your company, (you) I can be very useful as a student of economics and I know I can learn a lot from (ustedes.a) YOU
I am attentive to your answer. IMPROVE THIS CONCLUDING SENTENCE AND ADD AN ENDING
GOOD JOB JULIÁN! DO THE CORRECTIONS AND POST IT IN YOUR WEBSITE
GRADE: 3.7
HI DEISA PROFESSOR , THIS IS MY CORRECTION!!!
EliminarJulián Arrubla Gallego
Calle 127 sur No 48 A 11
Caldas Antioquia.
Phone: 3128914501
GAX company.
To whom it may concern.
I'm interested in the option of internship at your company gax gasoline, i'm a good candidate for the position.
Day today, i study economics in last semester,at the national university of colombia.
I am a disciplined, responsible and respectful person, i like teamwork, i am diligent and entrepreneur, regarding my studies, i'm studied at sena accounting technologist, i have advanced degrees in excel and project with microsoft office.
My work experience is great, because i worked as an assistant accountant, also worked doing statistical analysis and i was a seller in a store.
Currently, i am not proficient in the english language, but it in my interest to learn, i am a person interested in learning for life as a professional.
Really, i'm very interested in doing my internship in your company, you can be very useful as a student of economics and i know i can learn a lot from you.
I am attentive to your answer, and thank you for taking the time to consider this application.
With kindest regards.
Julián arrubla gallego.
Dear BHP Billiton 's Directors.
ResponderEliminarI have a dream, my dream is to work in a company that makes me a better worker and person and your company give me all of this posibilities. Also i appreciate so much the work that you do.
Nowadays, i am studying Geological Engenieering in order to be the best geological ingenieer at the National University of Colombia. This give many qualifications to apply for the job that you posted in the company's website.
I am a person who loves: the team work, the honesty, the science and investigations that applies to the engineer's work. That I think our job is also to be careful with the environment, because is our workplace, and Where after our children will live.
I have no job experience yet, but i am interested in doing some research projects, in order to request a great job.
I give you my sincerest gratefulness.
Manuel Santiago López Guerrero.
Dear BHP Billiton 's Directors. LAST NAME OF THE PERSON OR IF YOU DON'T KNOW, WRITE To whom it may concern
EliminarI have a dream, my dream is to work in a company that makes me a better worker and person and your company COULD give me all of (this) THESE posibilities. Also (i) I appreciate so much the work that you do.
Nowadays, i am studying Geological Engenieering in order to be the best geological (ingenieer) ENGINEER at the National University of Colombia. This give ME many qualifications to apply for the job that you posted in the company's website.
I am a person who loves: the team work, the honesty, the science and investigations that (applies) APPLY to the engineer's work. (That) I ALSO think our job (is also) HAS to be careful with the environment, because IT is our (workplace) HOME, and Where (after) our children will live IN THE FUTURE.
I have no job experience yet, but (i)I am interested in doing some research projects, in order to request a great job.
I give you my sincerest gratefulness. IMPROVE THIS CONCLUDING SENTENCE AND ADD AN ENDING
GOOD JOB MANUEL! DO THE CORRECTIONS AND POST IT IN YOUR WEBSITE
GRADE: 3.9
GAX Cover Letter
ResponderEliminarCarlos Andrés Pérez M
80aa avenue, number 10ª93, la mota
Phone: 321-xxxxxxxx
Email: caperezmo@unal.edu.co
October 2015-10-20
Dear Sofia Mesa
I am writing because I want work in your company, I saw in the company`s website and it interested me for the vacant of ambiental development, I am Studying Animal Husbandry in the National University of Colombia, in my life I had a few experience in this vacant I worked in the family`s mine and I learned a lot of management and environmental plans, this `s very important for the company because the actual politics in the World is to preserve the environment or mitigate damage holding.
I consider outgoing, responsable, intelligent and charismatic person, I learn quickly I Contribute alot about mining for the above reasons and more. I think help in your company to be the best and most recognized in the national and international market. If being responsable and caring environment that is so important to us and our future generations.
Thanks for your time, I hope it`s the right person for this vacant